Writing: I feel very bad!

FIRST DRAFT

I feel very bad.

I’m sick on friday, cough, begin at the friday.I don’t why, my dad said: “I don’t know too.”And I go to hospital,the doctor give me so many medicine, it’s so  nausea,it taste like the bug!!!But my dad said:”You must eat it!” When he say this, I think he look like so UGLY.Now It’s Monday. I wish I will fine.

SECOND DRAFT

I feel very bad.

I  was sick on Friday. My cough began on Thursday, I start coughing in the night. I don’t why, my dad said: “I don’t know either.”

I had to go to the hospital. The doctor give me so much medicine, it made me so nauseous. It tasted like bugs!!! My dad said,”You must eat it!” When he says this, I think he looks like a goblin, so UGLY.

Now it’s Monday… I’m still coughing. I hope I will be fine.